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Unread 01-29-2025, 12:03 PM
Susan McLean Susan McLean is online now
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Jayne, I mainly like the rewrite, but "incumbent" doesn't fit well in a marriage. Maybe "partner reveals" instead of "incumbent shows"?

Susan
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