Hi Jayne
There is a feminist critique to be had here in which it can be pointed out that women are twice as likely as men to suffer from depression and that this may have something to do with the strong social pressure on them to act kindly, gently, and unselfishly in ways that men feel largely exempt from. When men do show these traits they get brownie points whereas women are likely to be criticised if they fail sometimes to show them. The feminist argument would say that you should not beat yourself up about being a bitch sometimes.
But all that is political and the poem is personal. And it is good to appreciate and celebrate the one you love and the tricky negotiations you both have to make.
One nit. S2 L5
“But every time he really makes me laugh;”
I’m not sure whether to read that as meaning “On those occasions that he makes laugh” or “he really makes me laugh every time”. I’m thinking first version is closer to what you mean, so maybe rephrase it as “But when he makes me laugh, we really laugh”. Just a thought.
Cheers
Joe
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