This is a good one, Jim. The spareness is perfect for the theme. I join in by saying the title is too much. It is too heavy for the poem, which sparkles with its elusiveness. Titling is a challenge. I envision it is a manuscript with similar poems, each titled with a number. I think numbering it would be the best solution to the title issue and perhaps challenge yourself to write more in a similar size and mode. You have a knack for doing it.
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