You might want to lean into the Shakespeare a bit more. The poem made me think of another line in Hamlet, "I could be bound in a nutshell and count myself a king of infinite space, were it not that I have bad dreams." Maybe call the poem "Bound in a Nutshell"? I think it would make the ending seem like more than just a throwaway reference, and it would tell us what it is that the thought "slips past."
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