Hi Richard,
This was fun, and the flustered/irritated tone works well against ending, I think.
I agree with others on the title. I'm assuming you want the reader to consider the possibility that the fat, winged fucker is a bee (maybe you don't?), and I think the first two lines may well still do that without "bees" in the title -- and could do so even more, for example, if you went with "stung me". And once the identity of fat, winged fucker is resolved and I learn that it's not actually a bee but a baby with a bow and arrow (Cupid) who shoots him -- or at least that's how I'm reading it -- I'm left wondering how bees actually relate to the poem. And then naming bees in the title seems more of a misleading than a misdirect. But maybe I'm missing something? I guess you have "the birds and the bees" connection (though that's more sex than love). Is that what you're after?
Of the titles you've suggested so far, I think I like "Morning Buzz" most. You still get to suggest a bee, plus the "buzz" of coffee, and the "buzz" of attraction. And unlike with current title, once we learn it's not a bee, the "buzz" still seems to be doing some work. Anyway, I'd suggest looking for a title that doesn't name bees or Cupid. The latter would remove any surprise/resolution that comes from the baby with a bow and line line.
"Little fat, winged, fucker shot me."
Do you need a comma after "little", too? Otherwise "little" seems to be modifying "fat".
"Is gold a drug?"
I'm missing the connection of gold to rest of the poem. Is it something to do with the coffee? The cinnamon, perhaps?
best,
Matt
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