[Joe Crocker]

Hi Matt

Some satisfying themes and wordplay woven together here. Lots of Lights, Longs and Lifes.

I did wonder whether "specialised glass" could be "designer glass" which fits in with the built-in obsolesence. And I agree with Hilary that you might delete "shining".

Ravelled is a lovely word that actually means "unravelled" and I wondered whether that was what you meant. I want to read your meaning as supporting (rather than contradicting) the "gathering together" that precedes it. But maybe you don't. Or maybe you are happy with the ambiguity.

And I do like the introduction of the mysterious other voice that calls your name and the black feathers at the end.

Cheers

Joe