Hi again Glenn, and also, Hi to Richard, Joe and Jan,
I've posted a new version making use of everyone's crits to some extent. Glenn, I hope this new narrative makes more sense. Richard, I got rid of heretic and guile and threw out the last two lines in favor of something new. Joe, I did not mean my meter to be off, so thanks for pointing out some bumps. Jan, I hope I didn't lose what you found worth liking. The poem now offers a different take and a lot of changes.
I'd certainly like to hear which version is worth my future efforts if anyone still has time to give it a look. Thanks for the help already provided.
Jim
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