[Matt Q]

Hi Glenn,

Like Jim, my main nit here is with the God line. That's no because I particularly have a problem with the N thinking that the dog is thanking God, but because of how much this line gives away what's coming. If you were to cut that line completely, I think the poem would still work and be better. I'd suggest finding a line that doesn't mention God or Christianity/religion, so that "show me how to pray" comes as more of a surprise, and then has more impact.

For example, something like this would do it:

She shakes with joy, her face aglow,
as if lit up with gratitude for all
her happiness. Her features show

but no doubt you can do better. Then the "pure and loving faith" would be more likely read (I think) as being trust and faith in her master. In fact, might that be a slightly different angle for a revision of the poem and worth considering: the dog's faith, joy, love, obedience and trust in her master inspiring the N as a model for the best way to approach God?

best,

Matt