Thanks, Richard. Some good food-for-thought there! I think I will make the legs/pins change you suggest. I'm thinking about including the child's name and date. I don't actually HAVE that info right now, but this poem IS based on a real drawing and I could get those specifics without too much trouble. As to using mjolnir, am I wrong to think of that as sort of an expert's word? I wouldn't have remembered it without your mentioning it, and the child-artist wouldn't know it, being a pre-reader (do they use that word in the Marvel movies? I'll never know unless you tell me...). Yes, the eyes are as big as the horns in the picture. Not meaning to be snarky, is there some way to clarify this: "as enormous as the horns"? For now, I'm keeping, "No, look again"--while noting your finding it intrusive. I guess I think of this poem as speaker talking to himself about what he sees (while, of course, I also hope it conjures the strange and marvelous picture for a reader). Thanks again.
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