Hi Richard,
I don't remember seeing this before now, for some reason. And - darn it! - it's now past midnight and I have an early start tomorrow.
While I'm here, though, I'll just make a couple of quick comments. Firstly, I really enjoyed reading it!
In (4) I got a bit confused by "they", as I'm used to the old way of using pronouns (Ahem). Could it be "he" or "it" instead?
In (7) the inversion put me off a bit. Just a suggestion:
I have something I'd like to share... rather than an Insight I would with you share.
That's all I can manage for now. I hope to come back to it...
Jayne
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