[Glenn Wright]

Hi, Rick and Hilary—

Returning to this piece after a brief rest, I decided that I like the end stops in the first few lines, suggesting the slow process of flipping papers. The enjambments later in the poem underscore the heightened motion and mood of the N. I kept one semicolon.

I felt, as Max mentioned, that “shakes with joy, her face aglow” in L9 lacked interest and intensity. Accordingly I made a change that compares the dog (and N’s) excitement to an electric charge.

Rick—I like the ordinariness of the title as it plays against the dog’s excitement at the walk as a special moment of grace, which she communicates to the N.

Thanks, both, for your continuing helpful advice.

Glenn