Matt, I love the way decapitalizing "mass" in its second appearance turns "missing mass" into a physical health concern, while also reinforcing the initial mental concern of the date mixup (and perhaps that she has forgotten the earlier correction).
For me, the mention of "fat" snowflakes took on a different connotation on the second reading, because of the still-to-come "missing mass". The whole poem is gently, beautifully understated.
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