Thread: A one-way visit
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Unread 03-02-2025, 01:14 PM
David Callin David Callin is offline
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I really like this one too, Joe. I think it hits just the right tone.

The one micro-suggestion I have is that, for some reason, I would prefer

And that
is that


to be just the one line. I think the line break gives the ending an archness it doesn't need. But that's just me.

You give him a good send-off anyway.

Cheers

David
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