Hi, Glenn!
Because this poem is more about the thought exercise than about the poetic experience — minimal rhyme, minimal imagery — I find myself getting ridiculously picky about the details of the thought exercise.
As someone very concerned about immediate man-made disasters, I just can't work up much interest in a catastrophe that isn't expected to happen for another five or six billion years.
Since Homo sapiens has only been around for about 300,000 years, it also seems very unlikely that our descendants will still be Homo sapiens if they do manage to survive another five or six billion years.
"like spores dispersed through the cold, dark cosmos" and "like Hebrews in Sinai" do not seem equivalent to me. As I recall, the "Hebrews in Sinai" didn't experience a diaspora until they were no longer "in Sinai" (and some might argue that the Hebrews' descendants were no longer "Hebrews" at that point).
Just one reader's thoughts. Others may see it differently.
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