I'm stumped but intrigued. The javelin/spear, plane/missile dichotomy is nicely phrased, the difference in the use.
Ending by naming the poem an "epistle" stresses the poem as communication to the reader.
Some reactions to technical aspects:
It's an engaging nonce form (or a form I'm unfamiliar with), a sort of cousin to ottova rima.
Some of the enjambments feel awkward, particular the rhymes on "for" and "their."
My ear hears an extra foot in L4.
FWIW.
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