I like it and I identify with it. My sister Mary and I were recently comparing our passport photos to see who looked worse in them. My one problem is with the meter in the last stanza. Americans and Brits pronounce "hostile," "fragile," and "futile" differently, but all of them put the stress on the first syllable, not the second, so the lines that end with those words feel one beat short and the rhyme feels wrenched. I don't have a good suggestion for changes, given your very demanding rhyme scheme, but I thought I'd mention it.
Susan
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