Hi, Jayne, because you have a few anapests in your poem, there is a chance that the wrenched-rhyme lines will be read something like this:
Why MUST the RULES be so HOStile?
“THEY” would say, OH, she’s too FRAGile.
But MUST these MUSings be FUtile?
It may not be true in the UK, but in the US there is no chance that the second syllable of those -ile words could carry the beat. Especially when the other words are one-syllable, it can be hard to figure out what to stress in the lines. I don't think you have to worry too much about how Americans would read the lines, since you would probably be publishing in the UK. But I don't know how much the stress patterns would be a problem there.
Susan
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