[Simon Hunt]

I'm going to be tough on this one, Trevor. I like the swivelling fish, and the "leads to you" angle gives the poem a point...

But is it enough of a point to justify the lengthy preceding rehearsal of familiar information?

Not for me. It's sometimes well-described, but often it reads like a(n alphabet) soup of polysyllabic words from textbooks.

Sorry to be so blunt, but it's my true reaction here.

Best wishes,
--Simon