Hi Michael,
perhaps there are one or two too many questions.
Could S3 continue the thought/s of S2 and start "They'd make this a tight ..."? Thus leaving the delightfully long question of that stanza on its own?
Small nits: how was it a shrine, and to whom/what? The marsh gave me pause (but that's me not knowing the geography.) Is scavengers the right word? (Here they'd be called wreckers.) And might the ending be 'Gulls are screaming at the sun.'?
RG.
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