Hi, Jim—
I like how you use glancing references to various stories and relationships to characterize your feelings about information technology: Stephen King’s Pennywise, a woman you are flirting with, an angler lying in wait for a fish, a Trojan Horse, the Borg in Star Trek (“Resistance is futile”), finally ending with the last line suggesting our existence is like a Klein bottle. I was looking for a Matrix reference. Did I miss it?
I like how S6L2, “I succumb, become numb to it,” imitates the humming of electronic equipment.
A few nits:
1. In S1 you say that it “wowed” you, but in S3 you say it is “waiting for me to fall/. . .in love with it.” Maybe reverse the order?
2. “Trojan Trick” makes it sound as though the Trojans were the deceptive ones, but the Greeks fooled the Trojans. Maybe substitute “Trojan Horse?”
3. In S4L2 “like” is followed by a clause with a verb (“did”), so it should properly be “as.” This is a nit that would only bother a retired English teacher.
Nice work, Jim! I enjoyed it.
Glenn
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