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Originally Posted by James Midgley
I think you could lose 'a house / too fresh to say goodbye to'. I can't really make sense of it and I sense the poem lingers a little too long on the house.
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John, I think that's a good point. Other than that, I like it, and I think the close works really well. (I'm assuming this is a reworked version of the close I'm reading now.)
Cheers
David