[Alessio Boni]

Hello,

This is actually the first poem, within Eratosphere, I give my humble feedback on.

I quite like your poem, it's simple, existentialist, apocalyptic, and doesn't utilize any extravagant techniques to enhance the sound in anyway apart from loosely following the scheme, and changing some of the feet - length's, especially in the first stanza, where I noticed you kept a Tetrameter in both the second and fourth verse, whilst only keeping the Pentameter in the first one, and having a Hexameter in the third. I actually wanted to ask, Why did you choose to change the linear model of the pentameter only in the first stanza, and in the last?

Anyway, the fact that you kept the pentameter for the rest of the poem until the end could maybe imply the devastating and vexing effects of such a final thought (in which metric dies) that despite any 'hypothetical' effort to escape this galaxy being successful or not, there's still the (realistic) risk of a neutral void to encounter subsequent to such. If this is the case, then I think that maybe, and this is just my opinion, you could have tried to make it equally as impactful by keeping the last stanza in the same metric.

Bravo! I think of it as a nice poem to read whilst I'm feeling overconfident of my achievements, or vice versa, when I am subsided by anything. Vanity!