[James Brancheau]

How about "Judgment" as a title? For me, "A Story" is rather vague and so it doesn’t do enough for the poem. Though Phil’s idea concerning the Bible is interesting. I don’t think that you’d need Final there as your readers should be able to put that together. Unless, perhaps, "Final Judgment" could imply that, from that day forward, the woman will refuse to believe, or hold a grudge against God, etc. Hmmm... Is that what you were getting at with "A Story" ?? (And, distantly, I’d also like "Judgment" there because of the tendency (of some) to make God like us, with human traits. Here that is turned on God.)

I like this a lot too. Love the "string of tobacco" and the last line. “nut meat” confused me as well, but I don’t think you should change it. It makes sense (I looked it up, and, in fact, it seems a common enough way to put it). Finally, I agree that you should drop the “as” before "milky." I didn’t see them as that much of a problem, and that would do the trick for me. Nice one, Jim.