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Originally Posted by Trevor Conway
I mainly wanted to focus on the story of wheat and how it proliferated (with some physical cost to humans too).
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That's a very vague aim, which might help to explain why the poem feels prosey and generic.
Edit- That sounded harsher than I meant it. I just think maybe there is another way to come at the material, with a narrower focus, some odd (in a good way) angle that only you would think of … hope that makes sense.