This does, as critters have said, deliver worthwhile surprises. The message is important, too. Whether a poem is the right vehicle for the message is another question.
The title and the first line (formerly two lines) are turnoffs for exactly the reason Julie's first sentence describes. Finding this in a journal or in a pile of submissions, I'm afraid I wouldn't read further.
Would a more removed third-person perspective be worth considering?
I'm not sure the metaphor helps convey the message. If this woman can live twenty-five centuries, why can't she also be resurrected? The poem wants both things to be true, but doesn't show that they are.
FWIW.
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