[Glenn Wright]

Hi, Max—

Thanks for your thoughtful and helpful response.

Originally Posted by Max Goodman

Would a more removed third-person perspective be worth considering?
I gave some thought to the point-of-view and decided that because it was, in essence, a plea for help, the first-person POV was the most effective. I am not happy with the title, however. I haven’t thought of any alternatives that I like better, but will keep trying. [Edit: Writing this post, I thought of one.]

I'm not sure the metaphor helps convey the message. If this woman can live twenty-five centuries, why can't she also be resurrected? The poem wants both things to be true, but doesn't show that they are.
Democracies have been the exception rather than the rule in the last 2.5 millennia of human history. I adjusted the first line to highlight this. When they do appear, they have rarely lasted longer than a century or two, and seem always to be ended by an authoritarian dictatorship. The N, Democracy, can be resurrected, but says that she, unlike Jesus, cannot resurrect herself.

Glenn