Another good one, Hilary—one that I keep returning to, partly because I think it’s terrific, and partly because I’m still working it out, I think. I’m especially fond of “He didn’t want to leave: that was apparent” and “We found / ourselves excluded from the surfaces—” Really fine. It seems apparent “that one tenant” is a ghost (with the sword/dusty war/plague etc). And, yes, I think you need to keep “in” mirrors.
As of now, my understanding is that they’re all ghosts (“where our likeness should have been,”etc), though I’m not certain about the realtor… I would assume so… Anyway, that a couple of other ghosts are shopping for somewhere to haunt, call home, is interesting to me, intended or not. Makes you wonder why they didn’t have their own home. And, imo, it does nice things for that closing line. God knows I’ve been wrong before, and if I’m off about this, it wouldn’t take all that much away from my enjoyment of the poem.
The only thing that confused me was the trophies part, but maybe I'm just being thick. Very fine, intriguing work.
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