Hi Glenn,
I had a similar reaction to Roger. For what it's worth, the 3rd stanza was the best of the three, and I wonder if you could start with "I ask (politely) why they changed the homepage" and go from there or maybe go with a straight dialogue, potentially differentiating the two speakers using regular text and italics or something like that. If the two speakers have enough character, it could work.
All the best,
Trev
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