Thanks for the more detailed feedback. I appreciate the time you've put into giving me a sense of your experience with the poem. I'll keep it in mind and see what others think before deciding whether to bother with another draft.
Many thanks,
Trevor
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Originally Posted by Yves S L
Trevor,
Predigested food means standard surface-level popular information that has already been thoroughly worked over and presented many times in a similar manner. It is a bit like compiling excerpts from a breezy physics book that one would find in an airport bookshop and adding a little bit of imaginative speculative tangents which makes it a bit word-salady and some lineation.
Even if the poem attempts ironic self-reflexive meta distancing by referring to its own nature as predigested food, it still tastes the same but flavoured with old post-modern tricks.
There is some personal participation with the George Best motif, but that does not really need all that theoretical physics wrapping around a basic emotional need like dreaming to fulfill wishes, because as it stands, yeah, George Best, but it could be anything substituting for the common motif of "sliding doors": https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sliding_Doors |