Hi Glenn,
Thanks for commenting. On first impression, I'm inclined to keep the third stanza, but I'll give it proper thought. I wanted to bring things down to the very micro level there, focusing on something relatively trivial (the writing of this poem) as compared to the more grander-scheme approach in the other stanzas. Did the element of humour I tried to get in there at the end of the third stanza work for you, or did it fall flat?
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