Hi Susan, I'm struggling with this sentence -
For them to thrive,
you must be sapped, depleted, and disbursed
to fund their journey, so they may arrive.
It seems circular and repetitive, as it both begins and ends with reasons why "you must be sapped (etc)." The rhyming of "thrive" and "arrive" (both things that the firstborn child is expected to do) adds to the circular feeling.
Meaning-wise, I didn't have any trouble with it, and the title (Firstborn) is Biblical enough to justify the final line, in my opinion.
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