I think this is fine as you posted it, title and all. I don't see a need for changing anything. However, I might not object to losing the last stanza as Trevor suggests. If you do that, maybe change the title to "Beer and Sympathy"? I don't like introducing the word "therapy," though. Too clinical, and it's not accurate enough in my opinion. It's a good poem as it stands, so don't hurry to make changes.
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