I like poems that are written about the mundane and everyday life. I think this poem to me has potential. I think I would have liked for there to be maybe more narrative and not as much abstraction for the reader. Maybe include some description of the old guys struggling somehow and for the beer to maybe give them some relief. I think maybe after stanza 2 there could be some description of their mental state or something that they are struggling and then towards the end to show how talking and beer helped.
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