Hi John,
Two places that hit me wrong were "between" which I think should be "among" and "from the top of his single tree," which seemed askew because thrushes are known as ground dwelling birds, though they must get up high in trees at times I would think. To me it's like putting a grouse, or quail, or pheasant up at the top of a tree. Maybe a change might even add something to the piece. Say, something like, "from the tangle of low briars."
all the best,
Jim
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