[Chelsea McClellan]

Hello Yves,

This might just be me being dense, but you had me until the last 5 lines. I wasn't exactly sure what was going on or what was being said about it. "all that waiting weight" is nice wordplay, but I wasn't sure how we got from having already landed to "calmed to watch the bee delay."

"stay still sated" also threw me off a bit. I wonder if this might be a place for using a common word/phrase even though your wordplay / soundplay is fun.

Even though it's in the volta, "skin says no" still felt a bit too far removed, or not set up enough, for me to understand why there might be a no at all. Also, I'd be curious to find out if I'm the only one for whom the transition--from the lover and bee being the ones landing to the speaker being the one doing the touching at the end--was a bit confusing.

Overall, there is some really lovely language and play in this sonnet. And paired with some interesting ideas and questions. I just need a bit more help to follow you all the way to the end thought.

Take care,
Chelsea