Hi Alex.
the latest revision addresses them satisfactorily.
That it does, apart from the 'tides' line. I still think that needs work.
Also, L10 might flow more smoothly with 'A champagne' rather than 'In champagne'?
(And possibly 'glance' for 'glimpse'?)
RG
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