Hi John.
Forgive me for the delay
Ditto.
For me, the story starts when the monkey knocks on his door.
That's pretty much where all the originals start: a hero/villain happens upon/is directed to ...
That is not to say what comes before is useless or not good it's simply I think it can be pressed in after the monkey shows up,
I take your point, but that would be starting a story about an indigenous people at the point the colonial power arrives ... wouldn't it?
That said, I'd like it to be shorter.
Now what comes before reads a bit like a long introduction.
It probably is, but I can't see how else to establish that they were there first (and that he worked for his riches.)
That is all I have except to mention it could use a spell check.
Can you point any out? My spell check is fine (allowing for new coinages.)
Many thanks.
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