Thanks again, Richard! I like your suggestion for the 'tide' lines: the first instance being a non-personalized, more expansive image fits better; and the second reflects better corresponding line in the forward sonnet. And I feel that with the latest couple more tweaks I've just carried out, it's very close to final state.
As for 'looming'/'crumbling', though, technically, you do have a point, I yet believe that they execute well opposite states of the wall metaphor - one solid and threatening, the other disintegrating and weakening. Still, I did think of replacing 'looming' with 'towering', but decided against it in the end since it didn't carry that additional nuance of something threatening and ominous, rather than just tall.
Cheers,
...Alex
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