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Nicely done, Julie. The only point where, as a reader, I stumbled slightly, was the "come" and "comes" in the second verse. (Is it a verse, in a sonnet?)

Otherwise, it's fluent and enjoyable. So I enjoyed it!

Cheers

David
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