Hi Glenn. Any poet wants his work to be taken seriously, no matter how successful or unsuccessful it may turn out to be, and I think Chelsea and Julie have done you proud in that respect. I don't really have anything to add to their comments, except that "Father, Son and Dove" - something of your own coinage? - seems a particularly unhappy rhyme-driven expedient.
I did like the use of the simple language throughout, and some of the cadences, but not the overall approach. (I write as a semi-believer, at best, to use Julie's term - and even that probably overstates the case).
Cheers
David
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