It's lovely, Julie - really well-accomplished translation. I love this line: "All around us, leaves of figs and berries dream."
Something that seems not quite as successful as the rest - to me, at least - is "wing-flap noise enough to stun".
Somehow, the ending - both in the original and the translation - seems like an extraordinary act of rapine ... but I would have to completely reshape my life to be true to that thought.
Salut!
David
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