Hi Alex.
p.i. should have a second period (p.i.)
Yes, that seems to have dissipated somewhere. Thanks.
you might consider lowercasing it
Done.
would better suit the tone of that moment.
I like it's contrariness. It suits her. Also, perhaps the heat becomes oppressive and she just want a cool breeze.
Otherwise, very well done,
Thank you.
RG
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