Hi Glenn,
I don't hold any religious beliefs but, to use Julie's words, "I can still appreciate a religious poem without necessarily agreeing with its theological thesis."
Just two thoughts, for what they're worth:
In the last line, I'd prefer protective to protecting.
Secondly, I wondered why you altered the rhyme scheme for the last stanza:
Perhaps the Father, knowing me so well,
will, in His mercy, free me from that cell,
guide me home to Heaven, with Him to dwell,
and keep me in His love’s protecting shell.
I'm not keen on the inversion of "with Him to dwell", especially as you've employed a new word for the 3rd line of each of the other stanzas.
Jayne
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