Hi, Jayne—
Thanks for sharing your response to my poem. Let me share my thoughts on each of your three points:
1. I chose “protecting” rather than “protective” to emphasize that it is an ongoing action on God’s part rather than simply a quality of the shell or mansion in which the N hopes to dwell.
2. The rhyme scheme is a variation of the rubaiyat form used by Robert Frost in his poem, “Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening.” Frost’s poem is in iambic tetrameter and mine is in pentameter. It seems to me to be a form well-suited for eschatological musings. The rhyme scheme in Frost’s poem is AABA BBCB CCDC DDDD. The four rhyming lines in the last stanza signal the end of the meditation.
3. I think you make a good point about the inversion. I fixed it with a revision.
I appreciate your helpful critiques.
Glenn
Last edited by Glenn Wright; 05-05-2025 at 04:06 PM.
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