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Unread 05-08-2025, 02:58 PM
Alessio Boni Alessio Boni is offline
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Default On the Final Revision

This should be shown at the university of Sapienza, where I myself study, to actually give a profound and real impression of the state of our society.

Before I mention the specific verses as to why it should be shown, on the poem as a whole I must say its an effective and poignant villanelle, and, as in all effective villanelles, the intruding (and repeated) verse which served the image of a thousand individual apartment windows part of a monolith bloc deistically looking upon us, despite any condition we may be in, is well written and serves the haunting point.

That being said, verses 7 - 8 encapsulate EVERY single movement which claims to find its roots in popular support and to tie such with a political agenda. For my case, in Sapienza, it would be the incessant engraining, on behalf of faculty and student political associations, of the ideals of anti capitalism, anti - industrialism, 'open - mindedness', etc, which are all, of course, acceptable things, but, simply in statement, are extremely futile towards the goal of possible reform against the dystopia in your poem.

"as much is said but words they own!"

They own words, and that's about it. Unless they strike with something else,

"We've lost all hope and have to bear
flies humming in a monotone
inside the bleakness of despair."

I don't mean anything political in this comment and hope I was clear.
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