Hello Chelsea,
Initial impression is that there is not enough material for the stanzas, and consequently I interpret many of the lines as breezy filler, even though you are deliberately doing conversational digressions.
But perhaps the way the poem is not quite knit together is thematically mimetic.
Reading the poem again, I think my issue is mostly with the second stanza, particularly with the return of the diastasis recti/crochet motif. I feel like you are taking way to long (stretching it out excessively) to say what needs to be said because a form is being filled:
It’s funny just how often it occurs.
How many daughters don’t take time to learn
their mother’s recipes until their own
daughters ask how grandma knew to turn
the crochet hooks just right. Had she been shown?
Or did she have to muscle-up her grit alone?
But I keep changing my mind, since maybe the grammatical turns of the references to daughters and mothers and grandmothers is mimetic of the crochet.
I don't know.
Yeah!
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