Hey Max, Thank you for the feedback. Yes the Taco Bell Quarterly can get somewhat bizarre at times. I will try to work on the second half message maybe being more clear. I tried making the line breaks in stanzas 5 and 6 be more intentional and add more meaning but I think I still have a hard time finding the line between showing and telling.
Last edited by Harry Nicolas; 05-09-2025 at 03:40 PM.
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