I like the way this shows the guy (I realize I'm making an assumption, that it's the same guy in both parts of the poem) who is so unhelpful behind the wheel to be so helpful when she is.
In the first scene, I at first think they have somewhere to be, and that he's making it hard for them to get there. The first line strongly suggests this. "They should go home" jars. I guess they're giving up on getting where they were going, but I haven't gotten the sense that the detour has yet gotten long enough to call their eventual arrival into question.
Similarly, I have some trouble placing "what lies ahead." It's what lies ahead for the relationship (which the second, in a nice twist, shows to be more pleasant than she at this moment thinks likely), but what is it's literal meaning in the scene. I suppose it is the other obstacles he's likely to drive them through before they reach their destination or home--and that I had to work a bit to figure that out may not be a problem, for whatever it's worth I feel drawn to read it as their destination, which jars because it isn't an issue between them; however much they disagree about the route, they both at this moment want to reach the same place.
On the whole, this is working well for me.
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