Thank you for your further thoughts, Alessio.
And thank you, Hilary. I like the spontaneity of that earlier draft, too, and it's good to know it can land that way for you. Of course, there's no knowing that you would have understood it as clearly without the simpler later draft to prime you, and the simpler version is growing on me, too. I look forward to others' reactions and thoughts.
I didn't realize I'd revised "hopscotch" out until I saw your note. I've so discombobulated myself over several revisions, including one with an additional middle stanza, that I somehow lost track of that foot. (Seeing your note, I thought I must have made a simple typo and omitted the word, but, no, I filled the foot otherwise without realizing what was missing.) I've restored "hopscotch." Thank you.
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