Hi David
Your father attempting to horse-whisper his skittish bike was a lovely image. And I liked the questioning of strong but sometimes unreliable memories.
Glenn might be right about using em-dashes to make the parenthetical background more obvious. And Bernard Miles might question the pluralisation of Mackeson. Perhaps you need an apostrophe in there.
Joe
{edited to add that having re-read, I can see that "Mackesons" makes perfect sense given that "toasts" and "weddings" are also plural.)
Last edited by Joe Crocker; Yesterday at 06:44 AM.
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